Thursday, June 16, 2011

Haunting 55

Too many hours passed
waiting for him to come home
from the treacherous life at sea.

She waited and watched,
pacing effortlessly on the balcony
for hours at a time.

Every ship might hold her love
and yet she feared he’d never return.

Inside the room, a voice.
“Honey – who’s that out on the patio?”

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23 comments:

Monkey Man said...

Ooooo, I love this spooky goodness. Gave me shivers.

Chef Kar said...

Love the accompanying eerie photo ~ spooky.

Here's mine: Friday Flash 55 ~ Daytime Mask

Brian Miller said...

ooo...deliciously creepy....i like it...

Mama Zen said...

Spooky!

hedgewitch said...

Sometimes its hard to tell who's the ghost.

G-Man said...

Rachel....?
You are in this Dark Mode as well.
I Love it!
Too much Lovey Dovey shit I say!!
Thanks for playing, Thanks for supporting others as well, I've been seeing you about, and please have a Kick Ass Week-End....G

Monika said...

Whoaa. Its scary. And the picture completes it all.

The Bipolar Diva said...

total creep out here....goosebumps and all.

moondustwriter said...

would love to see the next scene of this one...

Alice Audrey said...

So sad when we don't accept what is and move on.

TALON said...

Loved it! Lovely and eerie!

Akelamalu said...

Spooky 55, I love it!

Belinda said...

Oh, this reminds me of how much I loved ghost stories when I was a little kid. Soooo goood!

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Ghost stories - not just for Halloween anymore! :)

yellowhousecafe said...

ha! I love the punch line; thank you for the creepy smile on this one ~

joanny said...

Love the creepiness of this FF55 & the photo helps set the mood. nicely written


joanny

Christine said...

How many times can we say spooky. Spooky indeed.

Margaret said...

This is awesome! We love going on "ghost tours" when we travel around and this really fits right in with what we hear. Never have encountered. Just a wonderful write!

Gowthami Nandigala said...

Ooooh,it scared me..!

Well written 55F!

keep writing:)

MorningAJ said...

That's stunning. I really never saw that coming! Excellent 55!

Olivia said...

Creeps... chills...!!
A very spooky 55.. loved it absolutely..

I don't wanna know who's on the patio.. I'm leaving already!

weekend hugs xoxox

Granny Annie said...

These are a few of my favorite things -- ghosts and monkeys:) (You got an aside comment on my post today)

Stranger said...

How did I miss this one?
I love how you build up the spookiness and then give us a good jump at the end.

I like your style.